Improvements to treatment

The main resons to why we had to make some changes to our treatment were because whilst our audience feedback we were told that firstly our location would be busy and in order to tear up paper and throw it at our female charachter we wpuld need a empty space and wait for other pedestrains to get past, and this is a problemwe would face as the bthe golden jubilee bridge was a tourist attraction area and to get a decent shot this action would have to be repeated sveral times which is why it was best if we didnt tear anything up as it would be litering and hard to pick up pieces as the wind on areas high like bridges is usually quite strong.

Second of all the hand drift we thought wasa  better way to end our video rather then have it during the middle and have our characthers leave the bridge with one looking at the other as we would needed the bridge to be empty in order to get a clear vision of depth of feild whilst ur female charchter was leaving and our male one watching her go. However we still chose to have a quik view of the hand drift in advance in between to give the audience a heads up of what will be happening further towards the end, just before the scene they start fighting.

In the redraft of the treatment we thought to have our female characther come into the scene whilst being on her phone as the song starts with a melody, so the shot of showing our male charachter seeing her shows that he knows who she is speaking to, which is why he looks away and comes farward to the bridge and looks out into the scnerey away from her. But just before she approches he scrunches a paper rather then tearing it up apart. Once hes close and snatches the phone, it shows his aggresion and thats when the narrative starts to kick in.

Another location that we changed in order to represent his lonelyness and to show hes lost in his thoughts is, lost in college in a narrow area where theyrs a bricked wall as its quite and shows hes isolated himslef as he thinks about his girlfriend and has realised the mistake hes made but is also angry with her for getting him back.

The pictures in between are there in colour and then fade into black and white, to represnt that they are becoming in to memories as it hints out to the audience that they may be on the verge of breaking up and turning theyr own way.